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Poetry
28 August 2015
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I just found this thread. heart

There is no Frigate like a Book 

To take us Lands Away  

Or any Coursers like a Page 

Of Prancing Poetry - 

This Traverse may the Poorest take 

Without the Oppress of Toll - 

How Frugal is the Chariot that bears the Human Soul. 

                                                              --- Emily Dickinson, in a less opaque mood 

I typed that out from memory, so apologies if the punctuation is off. 

I haven't written any poems in a while (I used to pop 'em off quite regular-- though they were mostly funny little things). I don't consider myself a proper poet-- more of a wordplayer. 

And hasn't anyone mentioned 

Good Dog Nigel - a-hard-days-night-john-6

Arf, Arf, he goes, a merry sight
Our little hairy friend
Arf, Arf, upon the lampost bright
Arfing round the bend.
Nice dog! Goo boy,
Waggie tail and beg,
Clever Nigel, jump for joy
Because we are putting you to sleep at three of the clock, Nigel.

It verges from the sublime to the ridiculote

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Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night by Dylan Thomas:

Do not go gentle into that good night,

Old age should burn and rave at close of day;

Rage, rage, against the dying of the light

Though wise men at their end know dark is right,

Because their words had forked no lightning they

Do not go gentle into that good night.

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30 August 2015
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I can't do poetry.......

But I want to join in so I sat here thinking I'd write a '50 word mini saga'...... You can have a title which isn't counted but not a word more or a word less......50 that's it.......

 

So here goes:

 

Exfiltration......

The action had been fierce and had not let up.

The helicopter was due. Soon there would be respite.

The four heard the low rumble of its approach.

It clattered it's descent.

"Go", shouted the leader...they broke from cover and scrambled aboard....

It had been a hard days night.

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31 August 2015
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I'm terrible at writing poetry myself, but I gave it a shot, so here's one I wrote that I'm fairly proud of:

The Small Neighborhood

 

There once was a small neighborhood

Right off the main road, it lay

Kids run around in the bright sunlight

With the blue sky above their heads

Laughter fills the air, as kids tell stories to their friends

As afternoon arises, the small neighborhood decides to have a picnic

Cold Lunchables and watermelon,

In the kids small hands

As they later go jump on the trampoline

As the hours pass by, the sky gets darker

And the music gets louder

The small neighborhood starts a fire

As the kids roast s'mores

They never want the fun to end

When the night sky arises

The kids start to yawn,

As their parents bring them home

With the full moon above their heads

Note safely at home the kids

Of that small neighborhood

Fall asleep in the comfort

Of their own beds

As they must recharge for another day

In the small neighborhood

(excuse the length, but I'm quite proud of this)

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31 August 2015
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Never been a fan of poetry but here is a classic.

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"I told you everything I could about me, Told you everything I could" ('Before Believing' - Emmylou Harris) 

"Don't make your love suffer insecurities; Trade the baggage of self to set another one free" ('Paper Skin' - Kendall Payne)

31 August 2015
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Not like poetry ?

Oh con-tare MMM I think thou doest ................'Don’t make your love suffer insecurities, trade the baggage of self to set another one free.'

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Porky the Poet (aka Phil Jupitus) with a poem (54 seconds in) about the time he met Paul McCartney , "which didn't go well".

"I only said we were bigger than Rod... and now there's all this!" Ron Nasty

 

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Wigwam said
Not like poetry ?

Oh con-tare MMM I think thou doest ................'Don’t make your love suffer insecurities, trade the baggage of self to set another one free.'

Is that poetry? I thought it was a song lyric.

"I told you everything I could about me, Told you everything I could" ('Before Believing' - Emmylou Harris) 

"Don't make your love suffer insecurities; Trade the baggage of self to set another one free" ('Paper Skin' - Kendall Payne)

31 August 2015
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meanmistermustard said

Wigwam said
Not like poetry ?

Oh con-tare MMM I think thou doest ................'Don’t make your love suffer insecurities, trade the baggage of self to set another one free.'

Is that poetry? I thought it was a song lyric.

You calling me a lyre !!

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Would you be averse to such a comment?

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meanmistermustard said
Would you be averse to such a comment?

Well.......Yes but I won't harp on about it.

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17 September 2015
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Here's another mini saga......Remember as many words as you want in the title then 50 words no more or less.

Title

'A leading expert in his field studies a note written 150 years before.'

 

"Dear Nancy,

Here's what you asked for.

Love Freda."

The professor examined the auctioned lock of hair and it's provenance.

'That's the last one, cloning can begin...... The Fabricated Four..How wonderful,' he said.

Behind him, teasing a hair from a lady's top-hat his assistant muttered darkly........'Fab Five'.

 

 

Edited: small top hat for lady's top hat for a little more clarity to the twist.

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28 September 2015
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A drop-of-the-hat haiku by yours truly. (References this

 

Forumpudlians 

Gathering to celebrate 

Return of the sun. 

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Here's a poem I really like from Shel Silverstein, he's the only poet I ever really read.

 

Smart

My dad gave me one dollar bill
‘Cause I’m his smartest son,
And I swapped it for two shiny quarters
‘Cause two is more than one!

And then I took the quarters
And traded them to Lou
For three dimes—I guess he don’t know
That three is more than two!

Just then, along came old blind Bates
And just ‘cause he can’t see
He gave me four nickels for my three dimes,
And four is more than three!

And I took the nickels to Hiram Coombs
Down at the seed-feed store,
And the fool gave me five pennies for them,
And five is more than four!

And then I went and showed my dad,
And he got red in the cheeks
And closed his eyes and shook his head---
Too proud of me to speak!

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That's a good one. I like Shel Silverstein. 

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I've been reading/writing poetry for school. What I find to be the hardest part is putting my feelings and emotions into my poems. I hate the fact that I have emotions, and it's hard for me to let them flow into the words I write.

Here's one I wrote yesterday.

Meadow Larks rise above the storm
Higher and higher, staying warm
Glistening skies welcome their wing
Clouds envelope the sweetness they sing.

Away they fly, undying flame
Making distant speed, always the same
A place where warmth and happiness flows
There they will wait, their home has froze.

They rise again, journeying home
Stopping not to repose, not to roam
Birds on the wing, sky to deform
The cold has gone, with it, the storm.

Mysteries availed, yet will return
Sunlight remains, lightly a-burn
Meadow Larks sing their swan song
It Won't Be Long before they are gone.

I really need constructive criticism. Tell me everything you hate about it, what could be changed to make it better, etc...

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@Evangeline I think that poem is quite good. Keep it up, and your language will start to come more naturally. Perhaps writing some poems that take more risks with rhyme structure and vocabulary will help you take it to the next level. They may be really bad at first. That's ok. 

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Very good, @Evangeline! I think "Clouds envelope the sweetness they sing" is my favourite line. a-hard-days-night-george-9

...Sorry, I lack constructive criticism. ahdn_paul_01

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I thought I'd translate Bohemian Rhapsody into haiku:

Mama, just killed man

Put a gun against his head

Pulled trigger, now dead

Mama, just begun

Now I go, throw it away

A note, A flat, G

Mama, Ooo ee oo

Didn't mean to make you cry

I'll be back morrow

It's harder than it looks.

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John Lennon is a very poetic man, especially shown in such songs as Happiness Is A Warm Gun and Working Class Hero .

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