The Beatles Bible - Topic: Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/ Simple:Press Version 5.2.6 Fool in a field of Strawberries on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74579 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74579 I have one that I wrote for a class, but I'm not sure it's actually any good. I'd love to know what you guys think of it.

Burning-after Ted Kooser

A wave of sound crashes over you as you enter the arena—

following people of varying colors, shapes, sizes, and volumes—

though none truly know why they are

here. You scrimped and saved for this chance

while not knowing why, and you never will.

Not knowing is what drew you to him in the first place;

a moth drawn to his flame,

burning your feet, layer by layer, as you flutter closer to the answer.

He’s superhuman? A god ...]]> Sun, 19 May 2013 04:02:23 +0100 fabfouremily on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74517 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74517 ^^ Aww, did it, really? That's so nice, thank you. I was having trouble with the second half and then it came to me when I was trying to fall asleep one night. It just all came so quickly. It made me think of Paul and 'Yesterday'.

Glad you liked it :D

]]> Sat, 18 May 2013 18:17:29 +0100 Egroeg Evoli on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74514 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74514 That is amazing. I love it. It's quite powerful. The end literally sent shivers down my spine. You are very talented, Emily. apple01

]]> Sat, 18 May 2013 18:12:33 +0100 fabfouremily on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74439 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74439 Autumn, here's the poem I entered the comp with. I wasn't able to make it as long as I wanted to, but it's still okay. Enjoy, hope the translator treats it nicely :)

Guerra, conflicto,

dolor.

Muerte.

Escasez de suerte.

Millones y millones muertos.

¿Y para qué ha servido?

El mundo sigue llorando,

simplemente deseando,

soñando,

en un mundo mejor.

En un paraíso donde guerra,

conflicto, dolor,

muerte,

simplemente no existen.

Hay gente que tiene miedo a la muerte

tiene miedo de ser arrancados de la vida,

de la tierra.

Algo que yo nunca he entendido

ya que la muerte es el final del sufrimiento.

Los que sufren son los que se quedan aquí,

esos ...]]> Fri, 17 May 2013 17:05:13 +0100 Egroeg Evoli on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74075 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74075 a-hard-days-night-ringo-8 Agreed.

]]> Sat, 11 May 2013 18:12:47 +0100 fabfouremily on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74063 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74063 ^^^^ I like that a lot :D

It sounds finished to me, though you could continue if you wanted to, I suppose.

]]> Sat, 11 May 2013 15:57:55 +0100 Expert Textpert on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74031 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74031 Here's another, more recent one that I have never shared with anyone.  I'm not sure whether it is finished or not.

There is a quiet voice  
that tells me I can't do good 
because of the bad things I have done.   
It is not the voice of my conscience. 
It belongs to enemies and lovers. 
It is a voice of ridicule and scorn. 
I have made it my own.   
 
When I love more fully,   
the voice ...]]> Fri, 10 May 2013 22:33:50 +0100 Expert Textpert on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74029 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p74029

fabfouremily said
Here's one I wrote in class today.

Sixty million, they said.

That's sixty million, dead.

Lives ended before they could flourish,

like weeping willows, undernourished.

People shot down before they could flower,

all because of the suits with power.

John Lennon once said:

                                  ''War Is Over

                                   if you want it''

I guess we just don't want it.

I like that.

Here's one I wrote a long time ago.  I don't know what it means. 

I don't really write much anymore.  Words disappoint me.

 

There is a time to drink,

to think outside of time;

for as we step outside,

our western glow retreats

into its shadowy bed.

We slip through hairline labyrinths,

through ...]]> Fri, 10 May 2013 22:18:27 +0100 fabfouremily on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p73882 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p73882 ^^^ Okay, I'll post it when I get it back from my teacher :)

]]> Thu, 09 May 2013 09:38:08 +0100 Egroeg Evoli on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p73749 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p73749 I'd love to read it! (I mean, I guess Google Translate won't be 100% correct, but close enough, right? a-hard-days-night-paul-7)

]]> Wed, 08 May 2013 04:52:21 +0100 fabfouremily on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p73666 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p73666 Last week my lit. teacher mentioned that a local school was running a poetry/short story competition and, after reading one I had shown her, she suggested I sign up to it.

I was hesitant at first because a) I don't think I'm quite up to contest standard yet, and b) it has to be at least two pgs long, and up to 10, and c) it has to be in Spanish.

Anyway, I decided to give it a try (nothing to lose and all that lot), and I wrote a 3 page poem (longest yet). I gave it to her yesterday and ...]]> Tue, 07 May 2013 15:54:56 +0100 fabfouremily on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p72123 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p72123

Egroeg Evoli said

a-hard-days-night-ringo-8 Wonderful! My favorite line: "I guess we just don't want it." We- meaning everyone and anyone who can- need to change this.

Thanks! :D a-hard-days-night-george-9heart

]]> Sat, 27 Apr 2013 12:19:42 +0100 Egroeg Evoli on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p72095 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-6/#p72095 Great poem, Sam! :) apple01

]]> Sat, 27 Apr 2013 03:33:35 +0100 Beatles in the Blood on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-5/#p72091 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-5/#p72091 Last year fourth grade I entered a poem called Red written by me into a poetry contest, and I got to go to the place with a bunch of other people from a bunch of other schools and read poem. But the best part was, A WHOLE DAY AWAY FROM SCHOOL!

Red is like the stripes on the American flag as it waves in the fall breeze.

Its like blood dripping down my skin after I'm wounded.

Red is like me cruising down the street in my old red Ferrari on a beautiful spring day.

It smells like a cherry on top of my hot fudge ...]]> Sat, 27 Apr 2013 02:58:27 +0100 Egroeg Evoli on Poetry http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-5/#p72025 All together now http://www.beatlesbible.com/forum/all-together-now/poetry/page-5/#p72025 a-hard-days-night-ringo-8 Wonderful! My favorite line: "I guess we just don't want it." We- meaning everyone and anyone who can- need to change this.

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